Revising the Opener

Fire & Moonlight Ambiance

Today, the writing includes a possible solution to problems in my Work in Progress.

Critiques showed the first draft chapters didn’t create empathy for the protagonist, or contain a strong hook.  My revisions hastily eliminated chapters one and two.

Result? An agent’s later critique showed the opening didn’t give the reader a picture of the the antagonist in her ‘normal’ life. (Oops, cut too much.)

The new opener shows the nine antagonists united to meet their mandate, thwart the protagonist, hopefully thereby  creating empathy for her and hooking the reader while we see bits of her ‘norma’l life before ‘The Labyrinth’  action begins.

Hope it works.  In any case, I’ll enjoy the challenge.

 

 

 

 

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